Tahji was curious. He’d never seen so many people before. He half hid behind the post to get a better look through the doorway. They were talking their people talk. Tahji could understand a little of it when one talked, but they were all speaking at once. It was so confusing. Perhaps if he got closer.
“There you are, little one.” It was Tahji’s child-friend Rohan.
“You shouldn’t wander off like this. You might have gotten lost.”
Tahji saw Rohan was carrying his ornate little home. The door was open.
“So soon?” The mantis had been enjoying his freedom.
I wrote this in response to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ Friday Fictioneers photo challenge. The idea is for authors to use the photo prompt above to create a piece of flash fiction no longer than 100 words long. Mine is 100 words.
To read other stories based on this prompt, go to InLinkz.com.
Dear James,
A fun little bug’s-eye-view story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks. I wanted Tahji’s story to have a happy ending.
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Seems we both went for happier stories this week! Well done.
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A taste of freedom is, perhaps better than none at all, although it seems Tahji doesn’t seem to mind his captivity too much. Nice story. 🙂
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Freedom and exploration are nice, but at the end of the day, it’s good to go home. Besides, Rohan treats him well.
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Sounds like a pampered bug 🙂
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Tahji and Ronan are best friends.
If I had more than 100 words to use, I probably would have mentioned that Ronan took Tahji outside to play while the grown ups had their gathering inside his house, and Tahji got away. This scene captures Rohan finding Tahji and returning him to the safety of his enclosure.
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I like it. Good story.
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Thanks.
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A domesticated mantis, now there’s an idea. A very interesting world, one in which a bug doesn’t mind a cage… too much.
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Admittedly, I’m taking certain liberties since this is fiction, however, it is certainly possible to keep a praying mantis as a pet. As far as a portable pet enclosure though, I was probably thinking more of how the Chinese and Japanese have kept crickets as pets.
The part about the mantis understanding parts of human speech is pure fantasy, however.
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I understand. I meant it when I suggested that it would be a novel idea. Mantis are predators that only feed on live pray, so it made me wonder how the boy felt about that. Maybe that’s the reason why he let it out every now and again. I thought it would be interesting to learn why the mantis came back. It must be a very strong friendship.
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The story is fiction with a hint of fantasy. In real life, it couldn’t possibly occur, but think of all the stories that show children and animals as having a friendship. That’s the relationship I tried to build between Tahji and Rohan.
As far as live food for the mantis, this generally means live insects. Rohan has a bond with Tahji a mantis, but probably doesn’t have feelings about Tahji’s food supply. In fact relative to flies, Tahji might be providing a service by keeping their population low around the house.
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🙂
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Really enjoyed this mantis eye view of humans – I really want to believe he could understand human speech and you made that all the more credible by him only understanding when one person was speaking. Great stuff, James
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Thanks, Lynn. I figured I was stepping out on a limb with that one, but I wanted a motivation for the mantis’ curiosity.
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You did it very well James 🙂
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Thanks, Lynn.
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Yikes! I forgot to leave a comment. I felt for the little guy – all excited to be out, discovering a new world. I could almost feel his shoulders fall. Fun take.
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Thanks. In some sense, I made Tahji a “child” to Rohan’s “adult”, even though Rohan is probably around nine-years-old. Like most “children” given a certain amount of autonomy, it’s up to the “adult” so say when it’s enough.
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This is one charming bug story! Really liked this sweet and gentle tone of your story.
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Thank you. I’m currently in the process of editing a longer bug-based story that has a grimmer tone.
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This was fun. Enjoy your freedom then, when it is no longer safe, inside you go!
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Kind of how young children operate.
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At least he got a little bit of freedom, and now he’s home safe.
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That’s true. Flies are on the menu for dinner, for Tahji anyway.
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Liked it!
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Thanks, Rosemary.
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It’s good Rohan was mindful of his friend’s safety. There was likely to have been at least one person at the gathering who wouldn’t have been pleased by Tahji’s presence.
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I thought of that, and if I’d had more than 100 words to work with, I might have made Tahji’s rescue to be more of a close call.
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This is a beautiful piece. A ornate prison is nonetheless a prison. I hope the grasshopper escape the next chance he gets.
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Prison or home? It’s also a place that protects Tahji from harm.
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That’s an interesting way to look at that. 🙂
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Nice how you show how people sound different from a bug’s perspective. I was thinking about writing a story where someone kept the insects as pets too, but I couldn’t get it to work. It wasn’t going to have as happy of an ending as yours, either, so I like yours better!
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Thanks, Joy.
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so soon, indeed. 🙂
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This reminds me of the story about the cricket in Times Square. Fun story.
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Not familiar with it, Amy. I’ll have to look it up.
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You’ll love it!
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Enchanting take on the prompt.
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Thank you.
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I was beginning to love the freedom too. 🙂
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At least he gets some freedom – many so-called pets don’t. Nice story.
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Some freedom is better than none… love the POV
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Thanks, Bjorn.
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Nice perspective.
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Thank you.
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