The Shower Scene

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© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The old motel wasn’t what Norman imagined. He thought an old Victorian in the California countryside converted to an inn would be charming and tasteful. But his room reminded him of “old woman bedroom.” Oh well, at least there was plenty of hot water for a shower. Cheap shower curtain but that part didn’t matter.

“What?” Norman thought he heard something but the shower water was too loud. “You know, if I didn’t know any better…”

The last thing he saw was the shower curtain being ripped aside and the old woman plunging a butcher knife toward his chest.

I wrote this for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ Friday Fictioneers writing challenge. The idea is to use the image above as a prompt to craft a piece of flash fiction no more than 100 words long. My word count is 99.

As I hope you can see, I was going for a twist on the 1960 film Psycho which starred Anthony Perkins as the infamous Norman Bates. Unfortunately, 100 words isn’t a lot in which to be able to build suspense before the reveal.

To read more stories based on the prompt, go to InLinkz.com.

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49 thoughts on “The Shower Scene

  1. I caught the reference, so the suspense built easily for me — as soon as Norman mentioned the shower, I was thinking, NOOO! Or actually yeah, try the shower Norman, you deserve it. 🙂 Clever take on the prompt, James!

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  2. I can’t manage any sympathy for Norman. That shower scene from Psycho remains horrifying to this day. I like that Norman didn’t suspect a thing. Nice writing.

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  3. That was scary, James. For a minute there, I was afraid she might be naked and carrying a bar of soap. Grizzly thought I know. I hope the visual image of that scene doesn’t rob you of sleep. 🙂

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